At Audiotuts+ we irregularly put up a reader track for workshopping and critique (find out how to submit a track). This is how it works: you upload your song, and every week or so we’ll publish one here and step away from the podium. The floor is yours to talk about the track and how the artist can fix problems in and improve upon the mix and the song.
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This track has been submitted for your friendly, constructive criticism. They have put their track (and their heart and soul) in your hands to learn and get useful feedback.
- Do you enjoy the song or track itself? Does it have potential?
- Can the arrangement be improved?
- How did you find the mix? What would you do differently?
- What do you enjoy about the rhythm track? What can be done to improve it?
- Is the choice of instruments relevant and effective for the style/song?
- Are the lyrics (if any) effective? Does the style, arrangement and genre of the song suit them?
- Can you suggest any specific techniques that might improve the track?
- Do you have any other constructive feedback?
Animated Vocoder Mix 2 by Blazznet
Author’s website: www.blazznet.com
Description of the track:
A light rock drum beat is used to vocode a synth pad which develops some simple harmonies. A slightly discordant organ, echoey bass and synth sounds chop a dubbie rhythm on top. Bouncy, paced and slightly scary in mood the pieces fades in and out slowly.
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I don’t know what you was aiming for on this track, and what sort of criticism you wanted as your description was very brief; but from what i hear i’ll try my best.
To me it just sounds like a mobile phone alarm clock sound. If this is what you were going for then good job, otherwise if you could explain a little more than please go ahead.
It’s also quite boring in the fact that it’s very repetitive.
The ambiance is very great, simple but effective.
My only reproach is that we don’t really feel any progression, it’s less or more the same thing that we heard during all the song, so it’s a bit monotone.
To enhance this you can simply increase the volume of the sounds that we can here at the end of the music (i mean this kind of strings, but i don’t know what is it really)
But the best things we can do is really add variation in rythmic, instrument (more or less) etc…
Nice job anyway :)
Heyya,
The first 2 comments are valid. Try to follow a structure when writing a song, like intro, verse, chorus, maybe bridge. Structure applies to instrumental work, too. In this way you will avoid monotony.
You can also shorten the piece and use it as a outro track for your album, or interlude.
If you want this as a full song, then you must find a way to avoid monotony.
Good luck with it :)
It’s a playful track- but I agree with the previous comments. The only “movement” you seem to have is the automation sweep in the rhythmic synth.
Toward the end of the song (3:40), it seemed as though you were going to take us somewhere with the added harmony- but then it goes back to the same thing.
Maybe think of adding a key change or a slightly different rhythm with the bass to use as a bridge.
I think encore’s advice of shortening this and using it as an interlude or outro on an album is an excellent idea.
Keep at it though- I think this could turn into something very nice. Thanks for sharing!
I agree with the previous comments…it is quite boring and lacks any dynamics. I like where you were going with the beat, however, it needed some sort of bridge or breakdown to keep it from being so repetitive…add a few new synths to help create movement filters to give the perception of change.
Keep up the hard work…cause I know what it takes to put together any piece of music, and I applaud your effort.
thanks for the comments and yes i do agree… this mix was intended more as a bed with not much development in order not to distract from the video or film content full remix is on its way with more structured development